Hi my name is Angus and I you two look at some of my writing what's called umbrella
Umbrella
One stormy evening, the door to Miss Elem’s Home For Children opened wide. The girl with the bright sunlight yellow umbrella, cautiously entered the orphanage before finding a home for her umbrella. Not wanting to be seen, Boris quickly whipped his head around the door frame. Standing off to the side, the girl observed the joyful scene as the children searched the box for hidden treasures. The girl smiled as she saw the boy happily zooming around the room with the spaceship as fast as lightning. Her smile slowly melted as she looked back at the umbrella holder and saw just drops of puddles. Her beloved umbrella vanished into thin air.
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ReplyDeleteHi Angus
ReplyDeleteWow, you have done a great job writing this piece for Umbrella. I like how you have included similes and interesting adjectives to make your writing more exciting for the reader.
Next time, remember to write an introduction with your blog to let your reader know what you have been learning and ask them a question, too.
Keep blogging!
Thanks,
Mrs Carney